yorukamome (![[info]](http://p-stat.livejournal.com/img/userinfo.gif){kind=small} yorukamome) wrote,@ 2007-10-22 21:24:00 |
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I'm not in a good mood - well, easy to see, this folio is horrible...but something sounds to
my ear not too bad in the haiku itself: must be after my "japanese nature", whose whispers
always intrude in a very non-japanese-like way in my generally clear enough lecture of my
time and life...anyway, it's the only thing comin' out of this longest tunnel of silence and
grumpiness - still grumpy, but I suppose it is time to give it a move and work again...
秋夜間
今日の哀れの
満々や
「aki yakan ・ kyou no aware no ・ manman ya」
autumn nighttime – brimming with the AWARE of today
(PS: obviously waiting for endless corrections by my japanese Maestri...and
maybe there's no nedd at all to add this - oh, anyway: MONO NO AWARE)
(PPS:...oops!, I realize only some later that there was one more appreciated
correction bysakuo3903 先生, which I'm glad to add now to this post:
秋の夜に
今日の哀れの
満ちにけり
「aki no yo ni ・ kyou no aware no ・ michi ni keri」)
my ear not too bad in the haiku itself: must be after my "japanese nature", whose whispers
always intrude in a very non-japanese-like way in my generally clear enough lecture of my
time and life...anyway, it's the only thing comin' out of this longest tunnel of silence and
grumpiness - still grumpy, but I suppose it is time to give it a move and work again...
秋夜間
今日の哀れの
満々や
「aki yakan ・ kyou no aware no ・ manman ya」
autumn nighttime – brimming with the AWARE of today
(PS: obviously waiting for endless corrections by my japanese Maestri...and
maybe there's no nedd at all to add this - oh, anyway: MONO NO AWARE)
(PPS:...oops!, I realize only some later that there was one more appreciated
correction by
sakuo3903 先生, which I'm glad to add now to this post:秋の夜に
今日の哀れの
満ちにけり
「aki no yo ni ・ kyou no aware no ・ michi ni keri」)
